The Magic Man
Once in a land of magic there was a man who ordered a wand. When he got home, he saw a it in a box. “When did it arrive” I said to myself. . He opened the door and tried it out. Now he could rule the world for ever and ever. He went to the modern world where the angels were, to get help from them but they weren't fighter’s they were protector’s. So he went to his brother but he would not help him because his wife just died. No one saw him again ever.
Thursday, May 10, 2018
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i enjoyed reading this because the magic man wanted people to help but no one wanted to
ReplyDeleteIt kept me thinking
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