Thursday, May 24, 2018

100WC #32 By Hayley


20%
Ring ring that was the bell. Me and my friends ran to class I sat at my desk. I saw a big pile of papers on the teacher's desk. The teacher said ¨I am going to read out the results of yesterday's test. Max 10%,Phoebe 100% congratulations, Madison 70%.¨ (etc).
When she called my name 'Kate' my ears all of a sudden perked up. ¨Kate 20%¨ The teacher said.  
¨But I didn't understand the instructions.¨ I exclaimed.
¨Well then next time tell me when you don't and I'll explain it to you.¨ the teacher said.

1 comment:

  1. I love the bit when your ears priked up great job

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